please proofread my text

marionline · Post by **marionline** » Wed Oct 29, 2014 9:12 pm

@ Taco Bot:
Thans for your help! I fixed the mistakes.

@Pepsi Ranger: Thanks for the link. It is pretty cool that a university offers support for all sorts of writing, not only reports and university-related things.

I'll post the next short part. I have a feeling that this time I added to many commas. xD

“Daniel, build up the tent!” The brown haired boy near the fire orders. His comrade raises, bows and walk over to the place where the three have put their belongings. The cracking sound of the firewood is joined by Daniel's rattling with tent poles and rustling of fabric.
The boy near the fire closes his eyes and rubs his forehead. He sights.
“Rim, tell me a story.” he says turning his gaze towards the woman leaning against the stone.
“A story, young Second Sand Mage?” she answers with a soft voice. She does not seem to be moving at all.
The boy addressed as Second Sand Mage frowns. “You heard what I said, didn't you Rim?”
The woman smiles lightly at his angry tone and sits straight up. “As you wish, young Second Sand Mage, I will tell you the story of my treason and Shara's mercy.”
“Rim, I know that story, and I was there as it happened. Tell me something different!”
“Oh ...”
“I'm waiting.”
Rim's expression is hard to tell, by the cloth covering her eyes, but she seem to be caught off guard by the boys demand for an other story. “One upon a time...,” she says to buy some time and then she starts to tell the first story that crosses her mind.

Matokage · Post by **Matokage** » Sat Nov 01, 2014 6:36 pm

Taco Bot wrote:
marionline wrote: There's a reason why English is the hardest language to learn!
Do you ever tried Portuguese? or even Russian? Those are HARD!

marionline · Post by **marionline** » Sat Nov 01, 2014 7:50 pm

@misac:
I'm learning japanese for several years.
I consider this a very hard language, compared to english or german.
But when I was in Japan, I saw that many people from other asian countries did not have the difficulties (or had other advantages, like the writing is silimar) that I had.
On the other had, I think spanish or other european(?) languages are somewhat similar, so if you know french well, you can guess a lot od spanish or maybe italian language as well.
I came to think, what langagues you consider difficult depends on where you're native language is located, more or less.

Wow, this is going a bit off-topic. xD
But should i ever try to translate the game i'll think of this.

Post by **TMC** » Mon Nov 03, 2014 1:12 pm

There were a couple commas missing in that last text, and one too many. I'd like to disagree with what Taco Bot said about commas; I was never good at English, but my last English teacher got angry at me for unnecessarily using commas in sentences like "The bird landed on the stone, and began to peck at snails."

Still, there are some mistakes. Here are corrections:
1. "Daniel, build up the tent!" the brown haired boy near the fire orders.
2. He sighs.
3. (Missing comma) "Rim, tell me a story," he says, turning his gaze towards the woman leaning against the stone.
4. (Removed comma) Rim's expression is hard to tell due to the cloth covering her eyes...
5. ...she seems to be caught off guard by the boy's demand for another story.
6. (Missing and extra commas) "Once upon a time..." she says to buy some time, and then she starts to tell the first story that crosses her mind.

With #6, I'm not sure whether a comma should go after ... but I think it looks better without.

marionline · Post by **marionline** » Wed Nov 05, 2014 8:54 pm

@TMC: Thanks for your help!

Mystic · Post by **Mystic** » Thu Nov 06, 2014 3:49 am

I came to think, what langagues you consider difficult depends on where you're native language is located, more or less.

This is in fact that consensus within the linguistic community, as well.

It makes me really happy to see people coming together from all over the globe to make games using OHR stuff. I guess it's not something I would normally expect!

Post by **TMC** » Fri Nov 07, 2014 8:35 am

On the contrary, I'm amazed at what a large percentage of people here are Americans. In other (English-speaking) internet communities I frequent Americans aren't so over represented, or are even uncommon. You guys are < 5% of the population.

Spoonweaver · Post by **Spoonweaver** » Fri Nov 07, 2014 3:21 pm

Post by **Bob the Hamster** » Fri Nov 07, 2014 3:21 pm

After looking a this page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_c ... population and sorting it by number of english speakers, I think it is kinda surprising that we haven't got any visitors from India (that I know about)

Spoonweaver · Post by **Spoonweaver** » Fri Nov 07, 2014 3:30 pm

The number of actual people isn't what's important. The number of internet users is whats important.
Refer to the chart on the right for the reason America is actually UNDER represented here.

Post by **TMC** » Tue Nov 11, 2014 1:32 am

That chart is 10 years old so things have probably changed dramatically.

Taco Bot · Post by **Taco Bot** » Tue Nov 11, 2014 1:52 am

TMC wrote:That chart is 10 years old so things have probably changed dramatically.

Maybe. But this hasn't:

Spoonweaver · Post by **Spoonweaver** » Tue Nov 11, 2014 4:23 pm

Look at this map. Japan uses Yahoo! lol.

Post by **TMC** » Tue Nov 11, 2014 7:43 pm

Nice chart. I'm disappointed that Yandex is the top only in Russia. Best competitor to Google out there, and very popular in east Europe.

Taco Bot · Post by **Taco Bot** » Tue Nov 11, 2014 8:30 pm

TMC wrote:Nice chart. I'm disappointed that Yandex is the top only in Russia. Best competitor to Google out there, and very popular in east Europe.

I'm personally a DuckDuckGo person myself, but whatevs.